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    Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Fri Jul 13, 2012 1:39 am



    I've been watching and re-watching this video today and can't seem to get it out of my head.

    So while we're waiting to figure out where the hell we're going to go next with project, I'm going to take you on a journey, into my mind, and write a pony fanfic.

    oh yes. This is happening.

    I haven't felt this inspired to write something since I joined up here and proposed my idea for Joanna.

    So here's the basic premise that the video is working off of that I am going to change and make my own:
    "It tells the tale of what woud have been the origin of Nightmare Night, and the catalyst element that forced Celestia to banish Luna.

    After defeating Discord, Canterlot was witnessing a very slow recovery. Misery could still be found everywhere around, specially for the ponies that had less means.

    Luna thought that expanding the kingdom and founding a new pony colony elsewhere would give a solution to the problem, allowing the ponies that she would choose for the matter, a new brand future. Celestia refused the proposal of her sister to scatter Equestria. For after such a great lack of harmony she thought it could shatter the kingdom forever.

    Being denied and in the shadow of her own sister, Luna decided it easier to ask for forgiveness than permission..."

    So, for anyone who hasn't seen any of the series that I'm obsessed with, this means that the video takes place BEFORE anything in the series happens.

    My idea is going to MUCH different:

    So, Princess Luna, having been recovered from her possession by the nightmare and with her kingdom recovering from the latest round of trouble from both, Discord and the Changelings, doesn't feel as though she's doing enough for her subjects. So, one night, while the princess is stargazing in her private garden, he encounters a lost foal who has sneaked into the palace grounds because he has no where else to go; after the Changeling attack many foals were left orphaned.

    Luna, being a royal figure, immediately soothes the foal's tears and lulls him to sleep with a song, the song in the video, and before fetching her sister and a guard to find him a orphanage, she decided to take him under her wing and raise him.

    "If I cannot help one little foal, then I cannot help an entire kingdom of subjects."


    So, there are a few of reasons that we are going to do this:
    1. To go over story creation and how to really get something started from scratch
    2. How to write a story, from behind the eyes of an experienced writer and what goes on in my head.
    3. To keep me accountable and writing this, I have a tendency to quit writing fanfics in the middle of them.
    4. to spread the power of ponies.


    So, hold onto your seats, 'cause its going to be a wild ride.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  Waytfm on Fri Jul 13, 2012 2:15 am

    I look forward to it.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  notop on Fri Jul 13, 2012 2:46 am

    So you plan on not only writing the fanfic, but also going over the steps you took for each segment you post? So, brainstorming, writing, proofreading, editing, continuity, creativity, and whatever other important-sounding words that end with a y? Alright. I look forward to this. I enjoy me some things that tell me how to do something better. And a good story too, I supppose.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Fri Jul 13, 2012 2:53 am

    Waytfm wrote:I look forward to it.

    Embarassed

    Oh god you found my post, I was hoping to actually get to some content before anyone actually read this.

    notop wrote:So you plan on not only writing the fanfic, but also going over the steps you took for each segment you post? So, brainstorming, writing, proofreading, editing, continuity, creativity, and whatever other important-sounding words that end with a y? Alright. I look forward to this. I enjoy me some things that tell me how to do something better. And a good story too, I supppose.

    That about sums up what I'm doing notop. I don't know if I'll post the actual fic here, probably not, but the writing process and my random ass ideas will be here.

    Basically a point-to-point 1st person account of writing the fanfic I generalized above.

    Tomorrow I will post a preliminary outline and generalize the character of the foal and how I'm going to portray Luna, Celestia, and the Equestrian society.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Fri Jul 13, 2012 8:12 pm

    So, in order to write a story we need a couple of things don't we?

    1. Characters
    2. plot
    3. conflict
    4. resolution
    5. world


    so yeah.

    The Characters:
    1. First and foremost, we have the foal Luna finds in her garden, probably a unicorn. I haven't really formed any ideas about where I'm going with the character yet, this is just me getting ideas down.
    2. Princes Luna: the grim reaper of Equestria, the lunar princess, and ruler of the night. She's saddened by the way that her ponies treat and fear her when compared the love and adoration that they shower her sister with. The foal stirs something within her...
    3. Princess Celestia: The Solar Princess, the ruler of the day, the elder sister. She only wishes to bring Luna out of her shell and back to the way that she was before the Nightmare possessed her. She would gladly take the responsibilities of being the one fo escort her ponies to their final destination from her sister, but cannot.


    Plot:
    Work in Progress
    Conflict:
    Work in Progress
    Resolution:
    Work in Progress
    World:
    Seriously, this is 'My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic,' but on a totally different level than the actual show, ponies die and things go wrong with disastrous consequences. This is not a romance based fic, an unusual stylistic choice for me, but is based on Luna needing to grow up and learn to raise this foal that she has taken charge of.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  Zarich on Fri Jul 13, 2012 8:38 pm

    So, bp, this is just your tips on writing a fanfic, or just writing anything, you are just using MLP as an example/base?
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Fri Jul 13, 2012 10:33 pm

    Zarich wrote:So, bp, this is just your tips on writing a fanfic, or just writing anything, you are just using MLP as an example/base?

    Not really a set of tips or a guide or anything like that, more like me taking you through what I do to write a story, fanfic, or anything.

    The use of MLP isn't really more than a framing device. The main characters from the show are not really going to be playing a big part, and the characters that I am using from the show aren't anything near what I would call a fully fleshed out characters.

    Luna and Celestia don't much 'in-show' presence, hence their use in this particular fic/project.

    While yes, they aren't my characters, they are vague enough so that anyone that we have join on here in the middle of the project could, in theory, pick up from the beginning and be caught up to where we in the story development process in a short matter of time.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Sat Jul 14, 2012 3:00 am

    Characters:

    This is the first real section of anything that I write, set out the main characters, both the good and the bad.

    the Foal:
    I'm in an unusual situation right now, usually I'd have a name for my main character, but right now I don't; he's just 'the foal' in all the notes that I've written thus far. He's would be about the same age as the Cutie Mark Crusaders, 3 other fillies (female pony child), possibly a little younger. Orphaned in the Changeling attack on Canterlot, the Changelings, in their initial frenzy to feed off of the love and affection that the population has for on another killed more than their fair share of the citizens of the capital city. 'The Foal' is one of many foals lost in the crowd of orphans and is easily forgotten in the rush to house all the orphans in orphanages that have seen little use in the last 1000 years.

    He's inquisitive and quiet for a foal of his age. He knows more than most ponies give him credit for, he watched as the Changelings drained his parents of everything that made them his parents, leaving only their breathing husks, devoid of emotion. He cries at night, held in the tremors of constant and violent nightmares.

    He's a pale, powder purple unicorn with dark mane and vibrant cobalt blue eyes.

    Princess Luna:
    For the first time since her 1000 year banishment, Princess Luna must guide the souls of her ponies to the afterlife well before their time, lest they linger and become evil spirits and loose what once made them ponies. Her subjects openly fear her presence, even her vaulted night guard tremble and quake as she passes. She alone holds sway over the night, dreams, and death in the Kingdom of Equestria; powerful and dangerous magic flows in her veins. Her sister, Celestia, knows that she was once a cheerful and laughing mare with a wicked sense of humor and wit that could cut steel; but the pony was long gone, replaced by the guarded eyes and cold mare.

    Luna cannot help but weep at her subjects reaction to her, it was not her place to question the power granted to her. She fears that she has lost what she once was, before the nightmare, and that she will never again be free to just be herself. One night, while out in her garden, the Garden of Shadows, she encounters 'The Foal' curled up under a bush off to one corner, gripped in another nightmare. She reaches out to him, and, without meaning, glimpses his nightmare. She reacts in shock and jerks back in terror. The depth of emotion felt by one this small astounded and frightened her. She has to make a choice, to call the guard and had the foal removed from her garden or to do something else. Quickly making up her mind, she settles herself onto the grass and gathers the foal into her forelegs, gently brushing some of his mane out of his eyes with a nuzzle; settling down for the rest of the night to sleep.


    So yeah, that's where I am thus far with the character and chapter building after just one day.

    Sure its disjointed and kinda random, but that's how things are at first, and they will generally stay that way until you get to the 2nd or even 3rd drafts. In any story you need to have compelling characters to help drive the rest of the narrative along, if the reader doesn't care about the characters that you've created why are they continuing to read at all?

    btw: if you have an idea for 'The Foal's' name I would be grateful for any ideas.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  turbulentDuvet on Sat Jul 14, 2012 7:02 am

    I know from disjointed ideas (probably why my KS fanfic has stalled ;~; ) but the general premise sounds fascinating, I do like a good bit of self-discovery <3

    As for the foals name, how about Chance?

    I'm not into MLP at-all but I'm eager to see what you come up with Smile
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Sat Jul 14, 2012 1:01 pm

    turbulentDuvet wrote:I know from disjointed ideas (probably why my KS fanfic has stalled ;~; ) but the general premise sounds fascinating, I do like a good bit of self-discovery <3

    As for the foals name, how about Chance?

    I'm not into MLP at-all but I'm eager to see what you come up with Smile

    Chance... maybe, it'll go on the list.

    Even if you're not into MLP, that's the point of this entire thing. I'm using characters that aren't really characters in the show, more like they're ideas that are present and underutilized, much to the chagrin of the fans I might add.

    This isn't to get people into MLP, just a way for people to discover how one particular author goes through actually setting up and writing a story, be it a fanfic or otherwise.

    EDIT: plus with everything that they're revealing at the SDCC there's so much more that I can actually play with and need to get out before season 3 debuts so that I don't have to rebuild my characters to keep them in line with the show. Yes, I was there for the entire MLP panel and I got my limited edition Derpy Hooves figure!
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  notop on Sat Jul 14, 2012 2:54 pm

    MrBackpack wrote:Yes, I was there for the entire MLP panel and I got my limited edition Derpy Hooves figure!

    LUCKY!
    I'm not completely into MLP, but I love me some Derpy Hooves. That's so totally not fair.
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    Post  MrBackpack on Sat Jul 14, 2012 4:05 pm

    notop wrote:
    MrBackpack wrote:Yes, I was there for the entire MLP panel and I got my limited edition Derpy Hooves figure!

    LUCKY!
    I'm not completely into MLP, but I love me some Derpy Hooves. That's so totally not fair.

    I was at the Hasbro toy village 3 hours before they opened, there was a line of about 50 people waiting to get in that only got longer as the day wore on. Thankfully people were only allowed to buy two of Derpy. I got mine a few transactions before they sold out.
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    Post  MrBackpack on Sun Jul 15, 2012 1:23 am

    be jealous, either of the rifle or the pony, I care not:

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    Post  notop on Sun Jul 15, 2012 2:50 pm

    Wow, that's pretty awesome.
    Both the Pony and the Rifle.
    Also the fact you got it before they sold out. Very nice.

    EDIT: You know what I just realized? What about the ACTUAL 6 year olds that wanted a Derpy Hooves? Are bronies not kind of screwing over the kids who also like the show?

    Not that I have anything against bronies, it's just a thought. I mean no offense or anything by it.
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    Post  MrBackpack on Sun Jul 15, 2012 3:57 pm

    notop wrote:Wow, that's pretty awesome.
    Both the Pony and the Rifle.
    Also the fact you got it before they sold out. Very nice.

    EDIT: You know what I just realized? What about the ACTUAL 6 year olds that wanted a Derpy Hooves? Are bronies not kind of screwing over the kids who also like the show?

    Not that I have anything against bronies, it's just a thought. I mean no offense or anything by it.

    See that's the thing, Derpy/Ditzy has always been the Brony mascot; a symbol of looking like everyone else but being just a little off. Not any better or worse than anyone else, just different.

    While I'm sure that there are goin to be some 6 year olds that are going to be sad about not getting her doll, I look at it like this: Hasbro made Derpy and Zecora as SDCC special-Limited edition figures, they never meant these for the open market.

    This should be my last non-story related post. I've been hard at work and finally have some more to share.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  notop on Sun Jul 15, 2012 5:57 pm

    MrBackpack wrote:This should be my last non-story related post. I've been hard at work and finally have some more to share.
    Oh. Oh right. This is a fanfic thread. Want I to move the random junk to a different thread?
    Also, Zecora? I haven't heard of that one.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Sun Jul 15, 2012 8:55 pm

    notop wrote:
    MrBackpack wrote:This should be my last non-story related post. I've been hard at work and finally have some more to share.
    Oh. Oh right. This is a fanfic thread. Want I to move the random junk to a different thread?
    Also, Zecora? I haven't heard of that one.

    don't worry about it, I started the entire off-topic trend.

    Zecora

    And its not so much a fanfic thread, or at least not just that, but a story building thread.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Mon Jul 16, 2012 12:10 am

    The Plot (heh heh heh)

    So, the main goal of this, as of yet, unnamed fanfiction, is to heal two very damaged ponies. Princess Luna must come out of her self-imposed exile from her subjects in order to, both, allow 'the foal' to grow and make friends with ponies his own age and for her to regain her rightful position at her sister's side as a ruler of Equestria. 'The Foal' must overcome his fear of being noticed and, because of the effect that the Changelings had on him, how to really love Princess Luna as his mother and not as a caregiver or guardian.

    As you can see, still very little concrete details being put in here, and my character, 'the foal,' is still unnamed and not fully formed in my head in terms of what he's like.

    Also, because this is a fanfiction and that means that I can play around with the world that I have been provided, I am making the Changelings much more devious and dangerous to the average pony than what was show in the show; equating them more along the lines of dementors from Harry Potter. They are dangerous creatures to all Equestrians, no matter who they are.

    Part of the nightmare that still haunts 'the foal' is him watching, hidden in his closet, his parents being feasted on by the Changelings; its going to be a major hurdle that Luna is going to have to overcome with him. I'm debating on making his home life less than pleasant, but I haven't decided on that yet, I like the idea but haven't convinced myself that its the best direction that I want to take this fic.

    yeah, still need a name for the little guy
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Thu Jul 19, 2012 1:28 am

    As with every story project that anyone comes up with, its best to have a plan as to where the entire thing is going to lead.

    Right now, I'm trying to figure that out.

    Its complicated by the fact that the ideas that I initially had aren't really all that interesting or capable of sustaining a longer piece of fiction like I was planning.

    So yeah, back to the drawing board.
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    Post  MrBackpack on Sat Jul 21, 2012 6:04 pm

    and then, like a high speed semi crushing a 'dillo on the highway, I have been hit with inspiration!

    expect major update in the next couple of days weeks!

    ... still need a name though.
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    Re: Pony Side Project: or how MrB writes a fanfic

    Post  MrBackpack on Fri Sep 14, 2012 2:36 am

    it has certainly been a while since I have actually done anything productive on this site.

    You can see my current progress in a collaborative fanfiction universe that several other authors and I have been hard at work on: Ponyfall.

    Ponyfall: The Dawning of Twilight

    This is my current main focus until someone really tells me what they want me to work on, not to mention my working on the fic that I proposed a few months back in this very thread. I'm still trying to work out all the kinks in that.

    hopefully will have something to post before too long. With the MLG Dallas coming up rather fast along with several other things going on in real life (my wedding) updates on my part are going to be rather slow.
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    Post  Waytfm on Fri Sep 14, 2012 3:36 am

    You mean Ms. Backpack will be a Mrs. Backpack?!

    Holy shit man, congratulations. I wish you two the best of luck. When is it (if you don't mind my asking.)?
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    Post  TheCynic on Fri Sep 14, 2012 4:10 am

    Mr.BP's getting married!!

    'Grats man!

    Very Happy Very Happy Very Happy
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    Post  notop on Sat Sep 15, 2012 12:29 am

    Congratulations! :DDD
    How exciting!!!
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    Post  MrBackpack on Sat Sep 15, 2012 12:53 am

    I guess no one really got that message when I constantly refer to my SO by the title: fiance?

    And the wedding isn't until May, its the planning and everything else that has kicked into high gear that's really sapping my time.

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